ORIGINAL: The automobile that went by very quickly was maroon. It went through a big puddle and splashed us.
NEW: The big puddle got us really good when the dark red car flew through it.
ORIGINAL: The educator removed the unruly student from the learning environment because of the sounds he was making
NEW: Because the student was making a ruckus, the teacher made him go away.
ORIGINAL: In the metropolis, the recreation area was dilapidated. Youngsters received injuries when they attempted to utilize the equipment.
NEW: People in the city got hurt because they tried to use the playground equipment that was dangerous.
Then they worked on an individual assignment, putting the following sentences into their own words:
During my earlier years, I experienced much conflict with my male and female siblings who were born before me. Now that we are more mature, we have overcome some of our differences and have the ability to interact pleasantly.
Here are some of the new sentences the students came up with:
When I was a youngster, I experienced a lot of bad things with my older brother and sister. Now we solved our problems and have fun. - T.R.
When I was younger, I fought with my sister, but now we are older, so we don't fight. - M.J.
When I was younger, I got into a lot of fights with my brother and sister. But since we have grown up, we stopped fighting. - A.Z.
When I was younger, I didn't always get along with my older siblings. Now that we are older, we can play and talk together without fighting. - S.D.
A few years back, I was bullied by my older relatives, but now we're grown up, the problems fade away. - T.K.
When I was younger I argued with my older brothers and sisters. Now we are older, we have stopped arguing and we have fun. - A.J.